Is this piece of writing good?

You should use better words to describe thing in you story, "Icky" doesn't really work. If you have a hard time coming up with synonyms if you have Microsoft word just right click and go down the list to synonyms and pick one out of the list. Also there is to much profanity, i understand one or two cuss words occasionally. Over all though i think it can be really good if you just try what i said.